Hi everyone,This week we will be finishing the fourth draft of our Welcoming St
ories.
Remember that you have to refine your Welcoming Story, focusing on the welcoming person only. Apply the WWWWWH and the story arc to the segment of your story related to the welcoming person. Remember to be specific, for example: include an anecdote, describe the welcoming person in detail, describe the first time you met that person, a specific time s/he helped you, your relationship with that person now.
I have very exciting news, however. Students at the Eagle Tech Academy in Columbia City, IN, will be reading and editing your stories. They are studying immigration, and they are going to read your stories, and will write to you with questions and suggestions. Then you will revise your stories based on their feedback to create your final, final, final draft!
So today, we will use our computer time to finish this draft of our stories and then email them to our Eagle Tech partners.
Open your draft in Google Docs and revise it based on Irina's instructions.
Then you will email it, as an attachment, to the Eagle Tech student I've assigned to you. Please ask me if you don't know how to email as attachments using Google Docs.
When you are all done with this, please write a post to our blog answering the following questions:
- How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
- What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
Post your answers to our blog as a comment.
I feel really excited to work with people from the other school. I hope that they feel the same thing. It's just something new to do and that's why this class is really cool. I don't know what will I receive back. I just wanted it to be something really cool and makes me wanted to do something more with them.
ReplyDeleteI would love to go there and visit their school. :)
DeleteIt's so exciting, isn't it?
DeleteYeees :D
DeleteI feel so excited about sharing my story. Is really nice that they are interested in read my story and my experiences. I hope they like and enjoy it.
ReplyDeleteI would love to receive good advices about how can i make it better. I’m ready to answer them any question they have and make them learn a little about myself.
Yeahh, I'm also excited to sharing my story with other people.
DeleteHow do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI feel a little bit weird to share my story with someone I don’t even know, but at the same time I feel happy and excited because people is interested to know more about immigrants and to help them.
What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
I’m not sure what I would like to as a feedback, I probably would get a lot of questions and maybe some comments to improve my story.
I felt really excited sharing my story with High School students from Eagle Tech Academy. I hope they learn something from it and like it.
ReplyDeleteI expect a helpful feedback with a lots of information which will help me make my story better.
I am agree with you I hope they learn something from our stories as immigrant
DeleteI hope you will get ur feedback and will be able to make your story better :)
Deletei feel really excited , because my story is going all around and people seem to be interested in reading our stories as immigrants
ReplyDelete2. i would love to hear some support and advises from them.
I feel excited about sharing my story with students at Eagle Tech Academy because now other people is going to read my story besides my classmates. I hope they learn something from my story and enjoy it.
ReplyDeleteSomething that can make my story better and encourage me.
How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI feel excited that they will know about our immigration life. They will learn something how we struggled here from the first time untill now. It’s really nice to sharing our experiences in this country.
What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
I would love to get some good advice how can I make my story better and I will be available any time to answer them.
Sharing my story made me feel proud because I have the opportunity to teach other how my life was when I got to this country, and make them realize is not easy to be an immigrant.
ReplyDeleteI hope to receive feedback that instructs me how to make my letter better and more enjoyable.
It feels really good to see that there are someone who is interested about my story, I hope they like it and I hope to receive good comments and suggestions to make my story better and better.
ReplyDeleteI think it's a good way to communicate about my own experience with others, and it doesn't me so uncomfortable, I can accept this way to make friends.
ReplyDeleteI hope she can share her story with me.
How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDelete- it feels great now people will get to know me and my story, and i get to know new people outside of NY.
What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
- may be will have them on fb soon :D and we will be good friends.. hopefully, and i hope she will enjoy my story.
It is so exited to hear that students from Indiana, will read our stories. I will like to receive comments that can help me to add or take out ideas, in that way my story will be better.
ReplyDeleteI feel so proud, because i have an opportunity to share my immigrant story with others.
ReplyDeleteI want also know her story.
I feel duper happy and I cant believe it because is amazing. I am so exited to share my welcome story to others I hope they like it.
ReplyDeleteI would love to get comments from them so I can make my story better
1.How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI feel excited because I can tell in the story my own experience that I have the first days that I stay in this country and all the problems that we face. One of those problems are the language and the new education system that have in this country.
2.What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
The kind of feedback that I want to receive is how to make better my story and who they feel when they read my story.
Newcomers Students,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your responses. Our students in third block just finished looking at your school through Google Earth. They're impressed that your school is so large. It's a beautiful building. If you would like to look us up on Google Earth, we’re at 107 N. Walnut Street, Columbia City, IN 46725. We're located inside the Marshall Building. One of our students, Angel Sanders, wanted to know if there was a way for some of our students to become "pen pals" with you all at Newcomers. We are looking forward to reading your stories. Thanks so much for your willingness to share! We have a great deal to learn from you.
- Mr. Urschel
Teacher at Eagle Tech Academy
I feel very excited about working with students and sharing our stories with them. I hope we will have a lot of fun and both sides will enjoy our cooperation
ReplyDeleteI would like to receive some specific comments on my story and his opinion what he thinks about it and how can I improve my story even more.
I feel very enthusiastic about sharing our stories with other students. I hope they will enjoy them.
ReplyDeleteI would like to receive some comments of how to make my story better.
How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI feel happy because other students could know me more deeply through my story and I’m not only remember many things I ever forget but also improve my writing skill.
What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
I want to get some good and useful suggest and some following question.
I find it very nice that we get the chance to not only share our story with our classmates but with other students outside of the school . I am hoping they will help me to organize my story very well , and tell me of there are some more details they think I should add in it .
ReplyDelete1.How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI felt great so they can react and have good news feed to make my story better.
2.What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
I hope to get positive feedback to improve my story
1.How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI felt so awesome to share my story because my voice has been heard by others.
2.What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
I hope to receive more feedback about my mistakes ,so that I can fix it to make it more clear to understand.
i am looking forward that my partner can help me develop my welcoming story. this is kinda awkward someone i don’t know and he is reading my story.
ReplyDeletei am expecting some respond that he can talk about some story about him.
1.How do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDelete- Its going to be an awesome experience, specially from people almost the same age as us. Even more awesome if they are going to give us feedback in the things we need.
- What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
Hmm let me guess, something that I'm trying to master... grammar would be the most appointed thing.
i felt good students from Indiana wanted to read our welcoming stories. i feel a little bit weird that someone i don't know is reading my story, but i also feel happy because someone is learning from my experiences. i am expecting some respond that he can talk about some story about him.I am hoping they will help me to organize my story very well , and tell me of there are some more details they think I should add in it .
ReplyDeleteHow do you feel about sharing your story with students at Eagle Tech Academy and why?
ReplyDeleteI feel great about it. My story will get its readers who are natural born in America. Therefore, they can feel my difficulties for coming America. Also, it is a great chance to edit my story.
What kind of feedback do you hope to receive?
I hope that I will get feedback with as many as possible comments and corrections on it, in which I can use to improve my Welcoming Story.